Question by Karie W: Can someone please edit my essay on homelessness?
When I work with people who have been homeless, I truly understand what they are going through. I have experienced being homeless to some point in my life for over a year.

Homeless does not necessarily mean living on the streets. Sleeping on the couch at a friends house because you lost your apartment, doubling up and living with family in crowded quarters until you can find a place, sleeping in cars, under bridges, and at a homeless shelters are considered homelessness. Some people are driven into homelessness as a result of cost of living outweighing personal income or due to loss of a job. More and more individuals that are homeless are woman and children.

Where is the government involvement in this issue to help these people off the streets and into temporary living conditions? Some say the government is doing all that it can to help these individuals. And I say that the government is not doing enough or there would not be so many individuals homeless.

My approach to this issue would be to create change for this issue. My plan would be to develop and create a “hotel-like” building to accommodate all the homeless in different parts of the world where it is more prevalent. The most important objective would be to create a “get back on your feet plan” which will be individually set up with objectives and goals for each individual. Each person would receive counseling to help them with their individual needs.

For example, a homeless person who was addicted to drugs would be rehabilitated and helped with his or her addiction. A person who lost their home due to financial issues can be counseled about financial planning. The plan would also provide them with family contact if they do not know or are unable to reach their family members. Best of all, we will act as an agency to recruit job opportunities for them, and stay with them completely until they have found a job. For those who do not have an education, learning opportunities and school trade certifications classes will be provided to them.

With the most of that help, it seems as if we can accomplish the “end of homelessness” mission but it is not that easy. One voice is not enough to complete this task. These individuals should be put first. It is important that us fortunate ones get involved in some way to help these people of this situation. All it takes are small contributions and involvement that can make a difference in their lives. By working together, we can help them regain hope and rebuild their lives. We are the ones that can give them a sense of hope and push them to change their lives. Ultimately, we have that power to affect either a single person or an entire family. Let’s provide them with the community resources and provide them with the tools for a meaningful,life-long change. Giving these individuals hope and opportunity they need to overcome their problems can make a difference in them changing their lives.

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Answer by SurfingLisa
Very well written, some grammar change is needed, I would include statitsics (i.e; 10% of population is homeless, 20% woman etc.).

Made the following verbage change:

We are the ones that can give them a sense of hope and challenge them to change. Ultimately, we have the power to affect individuals or an entire family. We can combine efforts with community resources and provide them with tools that can change their lives. By encouraging hope and promoting opportunity, we could prove to be the very avenue that launches a generation of overcomers.

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